As for the foreign words, felagi means comrade, you were correct in the heathen bit, and Bidsteall if I recall correctly means halt. Bidsteall and haedene are old Saxon, and anything else foreign is old Norse, taken from a translation site for old languages. This story is set in 8th century, and Aktorn is Slavic and doesn't understand their language properly which could be where some dialogue flaws are.
I'm glad you liked it! What were your favourite scenes?
As for the foreign words, felagi means comrade, you were correct in the heathen bit, and Bidsteall if I recall correctly means halt. Bidsteall and haedene are old Saxon, and anything else foreign is old Norse, taken from a translation site for old languages. This story is set in 8th century, and Aktorn is Slavic and doesn't understand their language properly which could be where some dialogue flaws are.
I'm glad you liked it! What were your favourite scenes?
I am real liking the names Rognwulf and Aleifr, ha and ouch. Tough question. Hm, I'd probably say the last few paragraphs once the entire massacre on the sandy beach took place. There was literally so much suspense and it was so good! I was hoping for more though, erhm.
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There is a deeper story behind it (and before it) and I've been thinking of writing a prequel for that contest piece to tell the story of Aleifr's father, and tell the story of how Aleifr gets his revenge, but I haven't quite gotten around to it yet. I think I mighthave some other stories to share though, and sorry for taking so long to reply! But I'm really glad you loved it!
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There is a deeper story behind it (and before it) and I've been thinking of writing a prequel for that contest piece to tell the story of Aleifr's father, and tell the story of how Aleifr gets his revenge, but I haven't quite gotten around to it yet. I think I mighthave some other stories to share though, and sorry for taking so long to reply! But I'm really glad you loved it!
No worries, take your time! I'd love to hear more of your writing!
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her favourite colour was yellow
Smiley: yes, I have a job now so I can be the breadwinner of the household and you can just relax to Rex all day :)
life goals [ ] become legend before mootinie [ ] get 10,000 post before mutiny [ ] marry smiley
Tricky: i don't think any of the staff+ are here to slap their e-penis on you
ask me about film, novels, fashion, cinematography, and/or music & you'll have my ear for hours
Doldol 🐾: I'm a Hyper Nova Doldol 🐾: Kharn can be a Doldol 🐾: Super Massive Black Hole EgN-S| Needy: lmao Doldol 🐾: xD EgN-S| Needy: dude idk why, but i thought you were going to say super massive black cocc Doldol 🐾: You can be a Doldol 🐾: LOL Doldol 🐾: nono thatd then be micro astroid Doldol 🐾: or so ive heard EgN-S| Needy: Like he's just one big degenerate penus Doldol 🐾: ROFL Doldol 🐾: IK Doldol 🐾: xd
her favourite colour was yellow
Smiley: yes, I have a job now so I can be the breadwinner of the household and you can just relax to Rex all day :)
life goals [ ] become legend before mootinie [ ] get 10,000 post before mutiny [ ] marry smiley
Tricky: i don't think any of the staff+ are here to slap their e-penis on you
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